Sela Locke

Sela awoke in a familiar place. Yet it wasn’t the kind of remembrance you feel when you get home from a long trip and look around your house, feeling safe ...

Ooh, thanks Smi! Yups, this could use some work. I wrote it something like a year ago, and then fixed it up a tad in... December? Or was it January? ...

I think your biggest problems are punctuation and repetition . You put the exact same adjective/noun/verb over and over again, which gets quite annoying. Try going through a thesaurus. Also, ...

Wow, I like it! It seems like an interesting thing to write about, and I certainly don't think its crap or poo. I didn't notice any grammatical or spelling errors, ...

Yeah, this was just a random thingamabobber. I'm writing an actual story, it's called 'Ancient Lies' right now it's in Action/Adventure, but someone might move it. Maybe not, though. xD ...

-Very deep voice- I will, Nan, I will. Okay, definitely not the nation. Maybe, the backyard? Yes, I'll look through it. SAYLUHH. P.S. Oh, wait. Dibbun, not dibbin. Also, Joyan/Kayo ...

Oops, someone will probably move it to fantasy. -makes face- It's set in the real world, but considering there are two walking, (on two feet) talking animals, I suppose it ...

It was a quiet night in the huge, lush forest, and only a solitary owl hooted; only a few insects scuttled through the deep foliage. A spider seemed to be ...

"Well, you boys can leave tomorrow morning hen i head down to town to get some supply's." Papa said to both of them. Supplies, not supply's. When, not hen, and ...

Diana seems quite flat to me. She talks kind of, blandly, and it seems like you didn't want to take the time to actually develop her. Maybe it's just me, ...

"no idea why...," You don't need the comma. ^^ I heard him laughing silently I actually laughed here, I was so confused! How can she hear someone laughing silently? Those ...

Whoa, slow down. Honestly, Nicholas is kind of... sketchy. I mean, he's only known her for about twenty minutes, and he's holding her and comforting her? It seems kind of ...

Oh, okay. I sort of pictured a government official as cruel, but mature. But, obviously, it's your story. ^^

Maybe it's just me, but your dialogue seemed unbearably flat. So little punctuation bores the people who review, and when there are seven chapters hardly anyone wants to spend their ...

I think that here, your biggest problem is redundancy, and cliches. I'm sure with such good reviews it will be shaped up in no time, and you obviously have talent. ...